Overall, I really like your article. It hits the point pretty hard. =) I'm wondering if maybe you should mention somewhere that the door is open I think most of the time right? And anyone can just waltz in whenever they want.
4th paragraph:
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Notes: "All of these things are wonderful." Maybe you can use a more elaborate word than "things."?
5th paragraph:
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Notes: "I know they are supposed to." You should probably add a bit to it saying they are suppose to do what? Oh, and all I can say is "ouch" when you mentioned how this wouldn't be something parents would necessarily want to see.
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Notes: Oh yea, why green? Maybe you can add a punch line or something at the end as to why it should be green...(I know you must like green since your jacket is green.) But like maybe like the color or grass and how it might give a more calming aura to the room? Well that's it for now. So sorry about this being late.
